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Put Yourself In My Position [by Johnny]

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I don't know what it is, but I like it.

 

slow down, keep your pace

this is not a horse race

all you need is a taste

and then brace

yourself for my grace

my embrace

copy and paste

this court case

from place to place

don't backspace

in this interface

don't misplace

the preface

harden your carapace

tie your shoelace

speed your footpace

clear your headspace

we're not commonplace

you're a queen, I'm the ace...

you make me flush

I make you blush

don't rush

hush

turning to mush

from this sudden ambush

this subtle onrush

drawn by a paintbrush...

I'm lemons

you're limes

you're giving me all the right signs

at all the right times

I'm giving you all the right lines

from all the right rhymes

hear the chimes?

in the meantime

in realtime

you're so divine

I might feel inclined

to mix the bloodline

redesigned to entwine

suppertime in summertime

sine and cosine

if you're not mine

by the primetime

my hotline could flatline

don't stop the plotline

don't stop the playtime

don't stop the turbines

don't stop the sunshine, sunshine...

beware

don't mean to scare

but I can't stop the stare

I might need medical care

you're just right there

with angel hair

quite rare

I'll take the dare

elite warfare

save you from the dragon's lair

we can share the fanfaire...

join my coalition

with an acquisition

through precognition

just one condition

full composition

hit the ignition

what's the definition

for recognition

and juxtapositions

an audition in tradition

not enough nutrition

in the new edition

tough competition

tough opposition

but I have ammunition

without inhibitions

on the road to perdition

put yourself in my rendition

put yourself in my ambition

put yourself in my vision

put yourself in my position

 

I thought of half of it while in the shower this morning, and the other half on my walk home from school.

I didn't realize it when I thought of it, but this really coincides with a girl I'm falling for.

 

Oh, and um, any suggestions/fixes/comments to make it better?

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I wonder if some one can put this into a music lyric? Well that is if Johnny wouldn't mind seeing it happen.It flows very nicely. I'm sure as a music lyric the constant rhyming wouldn't work.. or will it? :rolleyes:

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I wonder if some one can put this into a music lyric? Well that is if Johnny wouldn't mind seeing it happen.
It flows very nicely. I'm sure as a music lyric the constant rhyming wouldn't work.. or will it? :rolleyes:

Heh, that's why I said I'm not sure what it is. It rhymes like a song, but the timing wouldn't be right, I don't think.

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Damn, you got so many words to rhyme Johnny :rolleyes: I really think it could be a rap of sorts, you just need a chorus. Oh and the timing is fine, depending on how you say it and when you pause - IMO anyway.

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The words ryhme but, what's the message?

The first parts should have a pretty clear message, it kinda fades away toward the end though.

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nice rhyme...which may be collected to a lyric :)i found that jim is not good at designing but gift on poem thought...

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