My New Song Feedback please

[AnGeL KiSS 0]

I like your song. Man I swear theres alot of talented people with those poetry skills in the world, yet I don't have that poetry talent Anyway keep up the good work.

[biscuitrat 0]

It's all right. Sounds a little cheesy though with the lines about "loyalty beyond recognition", but other than that, hey. Lot better than I could do. I like the general meaning but the wording could be different. Don't get me wrong - you do it very well in a few areas (particularly the shorter lines) but run through it a few more times to make sure it's unified throughout.Good job!

[sacraficer 0]

im a rap fanatic and i think that rap was a good one. it sort f reminded me of an old gangster movie i watched

[Julida84 0]

im new here but its realy interesting place I hope i will stay here for i while..
little about me... im 21 yers old
and im working heh in viagra shop

[tdktank59 0]

i say you record it and post it here...dosnt need to be special but enough so we can get the point!

[confessionalchrissite 0]

I like the structure and how you used your words...

[Teri Luketic 0]

I thought the words were pretty cool fella.

Loyalty without praise is better than with.

I especially like that part there! How true it is, or at least how it should be.

[zerogravity 0]

wow!brilliant!inspirational!amazing! really loved it!yo! i'm into writing rap too.i've just started though.hoe do you write rap like that? i reaally want to know.