AnGeL KiSS 0 Report post Posted July 2, 2006 I like your song. Man I swear theres alot of talented people with those poetry skills in the world, yet I don't have that poetry talent Anyway keep up the good work. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
biscuitrat 0 Report post Posted July 2, 2006 It's all right. Sounds a little cheesy though with the lines about "loyalty beyond recognition", but other than that, hey. Lot better than I could do. I like the general meaning but the wording could be different. Don't get me wrong - you do it very well in a few areas (particularly the shorter lines) but run through it a few more times to make sure it's unified throughout.Good job! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
sacraficer 0 Report post Posted July 4, 2006 im a rap fanatic and i think that rap was a good one. it sort f reminded me of an old gangster movie i watched Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Julida84 0 Report post Posted July 4, 2006 im new here but its realy interesting place I hope i will stay here for i while..little about me... im 21 yers old and im working heh in viagra shop Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
tdktank59 0 Report post Posted July 5, 2006 i say you record it and post it here...dosnt need to be special but enough so we can get the point! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
confessionalchrissite 0 Report post Posted July 26, 2006 I like the structure and how you used your words... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Teri Luketic 0 Report post Posted July 26, 2006 I thought the words were pretty cool fella. Loyalty without praise is better than with.I especially like that part there! How true it is, or at least how it should be. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
zerogravity 0 Report post Posted August 13, 2006 wow!brilliant!inspirational!amazing! really loved it!yo! i'm into writing rap too.i've just started though.hoe do you write rap like that? i reaally want to know. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites