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What Do You Think Of These Lyrics? the lyrics to a couple of songs I wrote

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Hey just wondered what people thought about these lyrics, they're from a song called Lies that I co-wrote with my band, Local Rate. This song is a W.I.P.

 

 

Lies

This old town

Don't feel a thing

Holds secrets

You just don't see

And I just can't understand

Why you watch chances pass by

To get out

outta this town

 

Chorus

However many lies I tell

I don't wanna hurt you girl

However many hearts I break

I won't break yours

Don't break mine

With your lies girl

Lies lies lies

 

I walk down

An old town street

My head hangs

Know how I feel?

I can't look back 'case you're there

Can't stand to see you cry as

As I leave

Leave this old town

 

This is me

And I can't be

Anyone else

Please understand

Cuz I'm leaving this old town now

I can't stand the lies your lies

Now I'm gone

You broke my heart

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It sounds quite good! I'm never really good at judging lyrics without the hearing the song because a song can have amazing lyrics and a bad tune or the other way round! What's your band called? What type of stuff you do? "Alternative"?

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Yep the lyrics are good, although it is hard to judge without knowing the rythem/style that your gunna use... and as localrate sead you might want to make the song name a bit more relevant

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The lyrics could potentially go many ways over an arrangement perhaps you could also post a sound byte if you have a melody in mind or if you play an instrument so we could get a feel for what is going on harmonically and melodically along with reading the lyrics. Would also like to see some other people post links to thier music sites and/or song links - I would really like to hear what some other people on here are doing musically.

Anyone who's interested can visit my site under construction at http://forums.xisto.com/no_longer_exists/

Please post your links !

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