A Girl a poem I wrote about Haiti

[HoDhOd93 0]

Why does she feel like this!? Like she's at the bottom of the world Like someone's torturing her ? and she can move forward :: She wants to cry, but her tears are afraid to fall dawn! When she smiles? she knows it's like a fake crown :: She wanna runaway ? she wanna hide! It's like theres crazy woman deep inside :: Or maybe it's like a thunder, but a thunder without rain? She can't figure out the girl in front of her in da mirror...even if she tried over again :: She's lost in her own feelings, like there's someone crawling in her soul!! It's you! Cause without you... She's not a human ? she's just a useless doll :: The only problem she has is you She can't figure out what to do!! :: When she remembers all yr memories she's like flyin' over the moon Cause she knows the rain would fall dawn soon :: & her heart will beat so fast ,cuz she stopped waitin 4 yr train That when she sees you, it'll remove all her pain :: If she's not bleeding, that doesn?t mean she's not injured But when she sees you! She'll feel like a flying bird :: Cuz livin' her life without you is so much painful The girl is ME...and ur ma COUNTRY ..Cause um Haitian .. um sooo grateful

[BuffaloHelp 24]

This is so much better than the remake of "We Are The World". Why not make this into a song? I can see some authentic, Bob Marley influenced, "One Love, One Life" beat.

[SoulReal007 0]

Why does she feel like this!? Like she's at the bottom of the world Like someone's torturing her and she can move forward
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She wants to cry, but her tears are afraid to fall dawn!
When she smiles she knows it's like a fake crown
::
She wanna runaway she wanna hide!
It's like theres crazy woman deep inside

::
Or maybe it's like a thunder, but a thunder without rain
She can't figure out the girl in front of her in da mirror...even if she tried over again

::
She's lost in her own feelings, like there's someone crawling in her soul!!
It's you! Cause without you... She's not a human she's just a useless doll

::
The only problem she has is you
She can't figure out what to do!!

::
When she remembers all yr memories she's like flyin' over the moon
Cause she knows the rain would fall dawn soon

::
& her heart will beat so fast ,cuz she stopped waitin 4 yr train
That when she sees you, it'll remove all her pain

::
If she's not bleeding, that doesn't mean she's not injured
But when she sees you! She'll feel like a flying bird

::
Cuz livin' her life without you is so much painful
The girl is ME...and ur ma COUNTRY ..Cause um Haitian .. um sooo grateful

[SoulReal007 0]

I enjoyed reading your poem. I can really understand the girl?s pain; you did a wonderful job painting the picture with your beautiful words.

[johndeere 0]

I agree that this is a good poem. It really helps the reader grasp how hard it is for everyone down there. Good job.