My Made Up Poems.

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OK, here are some of the poems I have made up for my own entertainment, so I decided to post them for everyone else, please rate my poems from 1-10, and tell me if there is anything I should work on. ^^ I like writing poems. Especially limericks, concrete, and free verses. And please keep in mind this is my first post. And I will edit this when I feel like being creative. Here they are:

Limericks:

THE YELLOW MEADOW
I hopped in the meadow and onto a tree,
Something yellow i see,
what a wonderful surprise I've seen,
I think my sight was a little too keen,
that sun was a little too mellow for me.

A LITTLE LOVE
With a little love,
You can fly on that dove,
But don't try it, and I'm not calling you a siss,
Flying would be teaching yourself to throw yourself at the ground and miss,
Hope you won't see what's above.

^That was random, i need rhymes, LOL.^


Concrete:

Thinking of one. =P

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Meaning of life

My Made Up Poems.

 

How you live

Is how you Die

The smiles you give

Until you cry

All you touch

And all you see

Is all your life will ever be

 

-reply by Daniel Llamas

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What�s In the Closet?By SamanthaFar away, hidden by clothes and shoes, forgottenThis one item is lost in a black hole that may never to see Light againUntil the day I�m forced to search this area of uncertaintyI slowly upon my closet, I�m like a spy just waiting to be caughtI put my hand in and close my eyesAt once I opened them, like a mother bear hearing a threaten noise That could harm her cubsMy eyes have been caught, just staring in wonder and curiosityWhere in all the heavens and Earth would someone own this pink Floral dress? Maybe it was a princess� who wore this to the ball or a social EventOr a fashion model had worn this for the famous Ralph LaurenBut how is it in my closetHow is it in this world, the world left unexplored?A mystery waiting to unravel right before my eyesI keep wondering, searching for answersWhere has this dress come from and who wore it?What else does my closet have hidden in its depth?These doors will remain shut, like an Egyptian grave waitingFor eyes to rest upon it and draw them inWhat else does my forgotten closet hold in its grasp? -reply by Samantha

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The monsterous mysteryMy Made Up Poems.

sir what is this the confused schoolgirl cried,

You silly Silly girl I told you to revise,

Sorry said the schoolgirl with an innocent looking face

Your sorry is not accepted, this is a disgrace,

The girl looked up in fright, as she began to cry,

Ill get in touch with your parents, see if theres a reason why?

There is a reason she muttered,

And what is that he said,

I gave the sheet to the monster,

Whos living under my bed.

-reply by Sophie

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horrible day(sad love poem)My Made Up Poems.

Today I had a horrible day,

whats left of me has ran away,

the clouds they come and cover me,

the tears they rain on top of me,

for all that's lost can never be,

for everything you have taken from me,

my heart is broken in a thousand peices and there tearing me apart,

this hole in me is filled with pain that you have left behind,

and all that I have left of you are the memories in my mind

I must go on without you,

I must go on today,

I must go on dispite u and you'r terrible ways.

You have taken enough from me now and 'I'm standing on my own,

I cant beleive u did this to me,

but I'm not the only one.

-reply by julia

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roses are redMy Made Up Poems.

when I first saw you I was afraid to meet you when I first met you I was afraid to kiss you  I was afraid to love you now that I love you I'm afraid to lose you

 

-reply by angie