50Dime 0 Report post Posted July 9, 2006 Ok I know Its Cheesy But Ya Know Oh WellYo Yo My Name Is Joe Ya Gotta Show Me Tha Dough Or Ya Gotta GoDont Come Around Here Lookin Like A Thug If Ya Steal Mah Key YaGotta Pay the Fee John Cena Said You Cant See Me Then Tha MiniMighty Ducks Said Flyin V I Say Oh No they Goin Kill Me Like Moby You Can Get Stung By Obey The Book Hermine Melville Was SoBorin I Almost Spoke ForeginRate It On A Scale From 1-10 I Say 2/10 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
trace-uk 0 Report post Posted July 9, 2006 2/10 - you rhymed! :)Try to rap about something, a thought, event or make a statement. i don't really know why you're trying to say the above stuff.Nice effort though, better than i could have! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
50Dime 0 Report post Posted July 9, 2006 Any More Comments? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
TheArrow 0 Report post Posted July 10, 2006 Lmao......next time, save us the trouble. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Sprnknwn 0 Report post Posted July 10, 2006 So, I don?t understand. ?You make a silly rap and you rate it 2 out of 10? So, what do you expect us to say, you already know that is awful. I could even give it a 3... there are so many raps ongs that are even worse than this... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Pleex 0 Report post Posted August 10, 2006 3/10, Atleast it did rhyme but there were no sence in the text, try be a little bit more creative ;p, Goodluck Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
zerogravity 0 Report post Posted August 13, 2006 yo homie u kiddin me?that rap was crap!not a sentence had sense!what were u trying to do?stop wasting r time with your silly rhymes!!!! u've got such bad taste its seems such a waste!forget rap do smthn else! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Da Sick Kid 0 Report post Posted August 23, 2006 1.5 / 101 Structure Sucks2 You Dont Even Know What a Multi is(probly) 3 Flow was bad but not awfall4 No Wordplay or creativityHOW TO IMPROVE1 Structuredo it like this:Yo Yo My Name Is Joe Ya Gotta Show /Me Tha Dough Or Ya Gotta Go /Dont Come Around Here Lookin Like A Thug If Ya Steal Mah Key / Ya Gotta Pay the Fee John Cena Said You Cant See Me /Then Tha Mini Mighty Ducks Said Flyin V I Say Oh No they Goin Kill Me / Like Moby /You Can Get Stung By Obey /The Book Hermine Melville Was So Borin /I Almost Spoke Foregin /2: Multisu prolly dunno wat it is so check the rap tutorial i posted:http://forums.xisto.com/no_longer_exists/3: FlowTry to have the same syllables in each line and when you write a line they need to be relatively even in length4: Try using wordplay like....i dunno take a look in the tut. Be creative. 50 Cent has alright rhymes but raps about what you dont want to hear. Guns, Drugs, Money, B*tches n shyt. If ya gonna use a gun line then make it original.Hope This Helps, Ima Look At Your Next Drops And See If U Improve!damn that took awhile Share this post Link to post Share on other sites