Needed Someone Poem By Me

[Zaccid 0]

I needed someone to be thereBut no one was thereI needed someoneBut I had no oneI called for someoneBut no one comeI was aloneAnd still no one comeI cried to the skiesAnd still no one comeSo I sat and I cried to myselfAnd I felt a handI looked up hopefullyAnd you were thereI had someoneI was no longer alone

[biscuitrat 0]

I'd recommend changing the "but no one come" to "but no one came" to make it grammatically correct. Otherwise, it's touching and nice

[Zaccid 0]

Thanx for the advice on that ... I will do.

[missalex 0]

Good poem, though I think everyone is alone in the world at times, just have to be patient and someone will come along when you least expect it.