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[rejected 0]

My ex-girlfriend, Taylor, broke up with me on Saturday, and I'm trying to win her back. I wrote this poem for her and I'd like your opinion on it before I give it to her.The essence of spring, I watched your hairglisten with the light of a dawn morning.and with the eyes made of fire you embracedcold lips with the rouge dreams.With so many pains in my heart, I drivethe energy of longing to touch.Broken tears and sweating handsproduce my numb self. Always cryingwith the depressing thoughts.Like a young and wounded coyote,I am howling for your smile. Blessedgirl, female of platinum stars --the machinery of this sadness is crumblingmy heart into a mess of nothing.Thanks

[sonorama 0]

This is quite nice, rejected. It seems to be a big loss for you. I'm sorry you guys aren't bf & gf anymore...Keep writting, it makes you strong And also, you do it very well :DCheers!

[snlildude87 0]

All depends. Why did she break up with you? If it was something that you did, like something silly such as looking at another girl....on television, then I think it's quite possible. If she likes someone else, then you might have a hard time there.Oh, and if I may add something, try to put something in the poem that will remind her of the good things that you guys did. That works. Trust me.

[grandgamer 0]

ya thats a nice poem and u do seem pretty depressed with it it sort of seems like a situation im in cuz i like this girl who liked me but then a new kid came and now she likes him

[ilimanation 0]

Nice Poem

[rejected 0]

Thanks for the comments!I don't really think I can add anything else into here, this poem came strait from my heart.(to grandgamer: Make a move before he does; I bet she still likes you!)

[missalex 0]

Poems help people express their thoughts and feelings about their lives or other certain situations. I think this is a nice poem, and I agree with snlildude87.