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What Do You Think Of My Poem?

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so after my girlfriend broke up with me(and i still dont know the reason) i wrote a poem just to get the thoughts off my head on down on some paper. i'm not going to go back to her, but this is what was going through my head:i sit here and wonder what to doi close my eyesso i can see your faceand i rememberthe last time we were togetherits tearing me apartthe days are starting to pass slowelyand eating away at my hearti never anticipatedus having this time aparti hope you feel what i doi just only wish i knew what to doi just sit here day after dayreminiscing about the first kiss we hadand the first time we said i love youso what do you think?

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I like it. I'm not much of a poet, and I also don't know much about it, but it's nice. I can tell how you feel (Even if I don't know much about boyfriend/girlfriend relationships...never had a girlfriend before, that's why...). Normally, I'm no good at determining someone's mood in a poem, but I think you di a good job with it.

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"i sit here and wonder what to doi close my eyesso i can see your faceand i rememberthe last time we were togetherits tearing me apartthe days are starting to pass slowelyand eating away at my hearti never anticipatedus having this time aparti hope you feel what i doi just only wish i knew what to doi just sit here day after dayreminiscing about the first kiss we hadand the first time we said i love you"Emmm... :) i think if you or anyone make it to song in the country melody, to play with guitar... that will be working good :) .

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