Novels I have a couple of novels that I would like people to read

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I have a couple of novels I would like people to read and give feed back as well as ideas on what to do next. the first it The Gems Of Noya. CHAPTERS 1 TO 3.THE OLD ONES Some time deep in Lasador's dark past a war was fought between the eight god's of Noya. The gods fought for many years completely unaware of a ninth god biding his time. By the time they found out it was to late. With the death of Veletor god of light and one of the original eight gods of Noya. The remaining seven original gods fled to Cloy were Veletor's body lay. But there was no body in it's place was a pedestal and set within it was a large red ruby with Veletor's symbol of power. The gods then devised a spell using the gem they destroyed the ninth god. But in doing so they destroyed themselves as well. There gems were scattered through out the lands. And there powers lost to the world of man.THE BOOK OF LIGHT ?Vrail, Lord Tobias wishes you to gather the other children and meet him in the abandoned library as quickly as you can.? ?We'll be right there Sir Kren!? Replied Vrail as he ran up to tell the others. Vrail a tall green eyed blond haired fourteen year old boy and the oldest of the eight children. He was meet by the stunning tall blue eyed brawn haired thirteen year old girl named Kayla. And behind her was Jon an eleven year old boy with silver hair and brawn eyes. Haret also a ten year old boy with black hair and cold blue eyes. Leasa the first of twines both with black eyes and white hair. And Lexy the secant of twins and the smallest of the eight children. Together alone with Vrail they all headed towards the abandoned library. To summers ago the children were playing in the castles' library wen a bolder shot from a catapult slammed into the west wing of the castle with such fours it shook every thing. As the children ran for cover a wall lined with pictures of past kings collapsed. Behind the wall was a long hall ending with a flight of stairs leading dawn into darkness. The children raced to Lord Tobias and told him of there discovery. Who then told the king. King Hennry then ordered Lord Tobias and the children to document every book and scroll to find out why the library was hidden. It's been two years and the king built a new castle and gave the old one to Tobias for his services to him. They been dawn there documenting everything. The children meet Lord Tobias at a long table in the center of the abandoned library. ?Come sit dawn children I found something interesting here today so fare all the books and scrolls have had little recollection of Elair's history that we can read. All but this one it was found in a fake panel behind one of the shelf's. There was a note attached to it that said something along the line of ?This book holds meany secrets about this place and tells about the legends of the past and what happened here so long ago.? ?But wen I finished reading the note it bust into flames now it's ash's move about the flour.? Said Lord Tobias as the children sat at the table. Before them on the table was a book like non they have ever seen and they have seen a lot considering. The book before them was bound in a unusual silver material. The book all so had gold symbols and there is the mater of opening it. There was no desirable way to do so the pages wood not move and then there was the buckle or what seemed to be no mater haw hard they tried they could not get it opened so that they could look at the pages more closely. ?That's not even the weirdest thing about the book do you want to know what happened wen I touched it?? Asked Tobias ?Yes!? Exclaimed the children. ?Well at first nothing then after the note burned I turned my attention back to the book and wen placed my hand on the book it turned red like this.? Said Tobias as he demonstrated to show that claim as true and like before the book turned blood red. Wen he removed his hand from the book it turned back to it's original colors. The children were intrigued but were reluctant to touch it for they did not what would happen or if it can hurt then. Vrail was the first to reached out and touched the book for him however the book glowed with a soft light at first then grow harsh just as he removed his hand from the book. The rest of the children reached out and touched the book one at a time and the book did the same for the rest of the children. Then Tobias had an idea witch he put into action immediately he said. ?I have an idea I want for you all to touch the book at the same time and see what happens.?THE DARKNESS ?I don't think we should I mean why did the book glow bright for us and glow red for you Tobias?? Asked Vrail. ?I don't know Vrail and I can see why you are so skeptical it is quite strange but lets find out!? Replied Tobias. After a moments desition and a lot of persuasion from his friends he finally agreed. And together the eight children touched the book. The moment they did the book began to glow brighter and brighter with every touch. Till it was all most blinding them. Then the light died suddenly casting them into darkness. After a minute or two there eyes adjusted to the darkness. Only then did the children notes the book was pulsating on the table they exclaimed! ?Lord Todias look the book it's pulsating, Lord Tobias!? ?I don't think he's going to answerer us.? Said Vrail to the others as he got up to face Lord Tobias. ?Why not?? Asked Kayla. ?He's dead isn't he?? Asked Jon. ?Looks like it.? Replied Vrail. ?We need help quick come on we need Sir Kren!? Said Nick ?Leave the book!? Said Vrail just as Myrtle reached out to grab it. They turned and ran up the staircase. The children ran dawn the long hall wen they reached the end of the hall and pasted through the thresh hold of the library there was a loud crashing sound behind them. The children whirled around to face the hall they just came from for the sound came from within that direction. But there was no hall but a wall it looked as if its been there the hole time. But the wall had the same symbols the book had. ?Well that's just great haw do we get back dawn to the library now or to Lord Tobia's body?? asked Kayla. As they continued to find Kren. ?I know haw to open it we do the same thing we did to the book all eight of us must touch the wall for it to open!? Answer Vrail. ?And you know that how exactly?? Questing the others. ?It seas it on the wall back there.? gestured Vrail in the direction of the wall only twenty feet away from them. ?Oh, I see it now.? said the other children. They continued running then they all stopped simultaneously and turned back to the wall one thought ran through there mind they can read the wall there for the book. They soon arrived at Sir Kren's chambers and found him dead as well. Not knowing what else to do they ran into the court yard and gasped they were all dead every one is dead except them but that was not the only thing that was weird the sky was black not as if it was night but wheres there was nothing know light could be seen above not even from the still burning torch light as they scanned the horizon they could see around the edge of there site that it was only mid day. Then as to add to there unease the wind began to blow stronger and stronger but it was different it was not just cold it was as if it could bring death dawn upon them if they stayed here any longer. They know or rather hoped they know that the rest on Noya was safe for now at least. They ran not knowing what else to do they ran to the only place they know the kings court but that was a long way away there was a sound like no other they have herd coming from above wen they looked they could see a shape in the sky nothing more then it was gone. They increased there passe now wen they looked dawn they came to a quick halt for they all most ran into horse men they realized they were the king's men and they were glad for there arrival witch means that they sow what happened and came to help. ? Come With Us Young Masters We Will Take You To The King!? they yelled because as they spoke the wind rose stronger then they though possible. ?The King Will Wont To Know What happened Here And What All The Light And Horrific Sounds Were Coming From.? Yelled the knight's again. ?From what you just said we are missing info to.? Sail Vrail. ?Were is Lord Tobias and Sir Kren we had strict orders to take them and you the the king promptly?? The knight's asked. ?There dead along with every one else.? Replied the children. The knight's had trouble getting the children on there horses for no mater how hard they tried to lift them on there horses the wind would push them dawn it was as if the wind or rather what was it the wind for now one could see the wind blowing and it was black like every thing else the wind also whisper dreadful thing things best left unsaid and with the bead. Finally they were off going towards the king and to safety. When they arrived they were ushered in and immediately taken to the king. The children and the king exchanged there knowledge on what happened. ? So my friends are dead because you found and touched a book that bib who knows what to or with them for we don't know if they are relay dead or not the few we have here seem to be dead but yet they sleep and speak yet wen they were cut open there was nothing inside them they were empty and yet they still spoke as if they were unaware they were dead or living. The king had a hand full of guards go to the estate and clean up the mess the body's were brought to the king and examined. The children were sen to the guest chambers and told they were able to sleep there for the knight.

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AND THIS IS MY SECOUNT NOVEL Zelanther Destiny chapters 1-3The beginning Of The End It was a cold dark night at Luto's Keep. Dragons and there riders prepared to leave on what would most certainly be there last chance to save the world. As the riders and there dragon companions prepared to leave Luo a tiny man just left of the current wing leader asked. ?Is that the last Kregan?? ?The last we could find there mite be more but I doubt they will survive.? ? Not with the Dark Lord after them and us no doubt.? chided Laya a fair lady slightly to the right of Kregan. As they took flight the dragons arranged them self in a triangular formation so that Frail a female gold dragon and her rider Jenny a light and power full elf was guarded at all times. As they flue more dragon and there riders joined as well as meany wild dragons. Wen they first took flight they were thirty strong now they were seventy strong and growing. It got colder as they flue not even the dragons internal flame could keep them worm. And with the wing leader constantly changing none of the dragons dared breath fire in fear of hitting another dragon or rider in case they pass there way. The riders would not conger fire with magic in fear that the dark lord would find them. As they neared Trager the farthest south they could go before hitting the Shadow Lands the dragons noted the dark lords dragon's sent but from a witch was not threatening they alerted there riders any way but by then it was to late the Dark Lord had spotted them but did not attack he never has but tries to stop them by other means. As the dragons avoided the Dark Lord attempt to stop them Kragen gave Frail and Jenny the order to leave as quickly as possible they abode there orders. Jenny prepared to open a Shadow door so that they could escape wen they were safely inside they closed the door to there friends. The land scape before them was strange to them both. Not knowing what else to do Jenny took out the object she was intrusted to keep safe she slipped it in to a bag and wrought a note and teleported it dawn in the ground creating a cavern were it lay. But also created a massive cavern that leads to the surface so that they could watch and protect the bag till the right time comes. Wen she finished a chill ran dawn her spine and she turned around there before her was a shadow door and coming throw was Kregan on his dragon followed by the Dark Lord all so on his dragon. Jenny drew her sword ready for an attack but Kergon said? ?No don't hurt him he is not what you think he is let him explain!? ?Then do so convince me not to kill you right now Dark Lord!? demanded Jenny. ?As you wish for starters my name is Ilander and my dragon's name is Krill we were sent like you to your time to worn you and help you here now and for the same reason.? As the spoke he removed a smiler bag and placed it with the other then continued. ?The time we are from is the one created by this one had we not came. We have bin trying to get your attention so that we could explain what would happen to your time if it would stay on its current course but with out us.? Ilander and created an image of the world that would have bin and explained. ?The items we have go together but are separate. The dragons of my time were slowly becoming extincted because there was no males and females that were able to mate by the time there were it was to late for my world so we came to yours and from there to here.? ?Wait if you were only here to help then who was everyone running from wen the three cassias of Gerya fell?? asked Jenny ?me but a different me some haw wen people go through a Shadow Door it creates an opposite them so if your good wen you go through one then your opposite is evil and the same for evil. But now we are stuck here till a thing called the Day of Darkness we don't know wen it is or what it is exactly. The years that followed the three companions and there dragons became close friends here cavern grow to accommodate them all. But eventually they mad a cassia with a large tunnels so the dragon could move about with ease and with out being herd from above. Eventually the people of the time expanded there towns and lived all around the country. The castle then became a place of learning but all was had the same teachers and all was with there forbidden places and much more.This is not the end of aware story just the end of peace. THE OBJECT Zelanther stood watching the tall grass of the Allai plateau. He kept his eyes on the slow moving grass occasionally a bird would fly dawn and pluck a blade or two for a near by nest. After a while of watching the grass and birds his eyes turned to the sky and watched the sun move about the sky. Zelanther was a young fifteen year old boy his hair a bark beige and eyes a deep brawn. His clothing were of a fine material. As day tuned to dusk he headed through the Ragon forest were his brother was heading back to town. He followed what they called the water drop trail witch lead Zelanther deeper into the Ragon forest he lost the trail so he decided since it was late he wold turn in for the night. In the morning Zelanther found the trail and veered towards home. By midday he reached the thickest point of the forest were his brother would be waiting for him. But he was not instead there was a great aura of light emanating from the small clearing pulsating with a verity of intensity. As the aura of light grow stronger Zelanther intently moved back just then the light burst out ward throwing him into the trees he fell to the ground unconscious. He was waken abruptly be a woman like none he has seen before he sat up blinking and there she sat and she looked about like she was expecting trouble. She said Quickly. ?I don't have much time they will come for me and I don't know haw much longer I can last you are the one we've been searching for go to the great tower and run don't stop go now they are all most here may you remain safe and take this as well.? She gestured to a small box with a cut along the sides and front. He did not know why he did what she said but he did non the less. And he ran as fast as he could. There was a deafening boom and a massive fire erupted from were the lady was. There was a great meany screams that followed closely behind and a deep throaty laugh then turned into outrage then it was gone. And the forest was silent once more except with the faint sound of wood crackling and the soft glow of embers. Zelanther did not sleep that night but moved as quickly as he could case the things in the fire came back witch he figured that a fire such as that he was almost certain that now one could service. He could tell from were he was that a good portion of the forest was uprooted and others were scorched in the flames the forest burned most all that night. By morning it was extinguished by the rain. While Zelanther waited for the rain to stop under the cover a a near by tree he tried to open the box but could not so he amused him self trying every way he cold think of to open it. By the time he stopped the rain had long sensed its dawn poor. But he only stopped wen he got frustrated and only then did he truly notice that the rain had stopped long ago. So he stood and walked till his feet hurt by then he reached the end of the fifth day he had to get back to town by tomorrow before the town came looking for him or more accurately his mother came looking for him trailing the towns people behind her. He slept lightly that night still in fear of sleeping to deeply in case the strange beings came back and found him for he was shore he stood know chance against those things. His dreams filled him with dread he sow the lady in flames with an almost dead looking man with a dark glow around him. He laughing at her then turned to him and asked? ?Where are you boy were are you going give me that now!? Zelanther know he was dreaming for some thing that horrific could surly not exist yet it left him feeling ill even in sleep.Home The next morning Zelanther woke in fear of his dreams the night before. He hurriedly grabbed the box and headed for home as fast as he could. He walked through the trees till he saw a clearing twenty feet to his left. The clearing was the beginning of the Mader Valley. Zelanther traveled throw Mader valley till he grow hungry and stopped at a hallow stump were he retrieved a half eaten lunch left for him and his brother it was suprisingly freash for a four day old half eaten meal in fact it was as if it was only two day's old he assumed his brother all ready came this way and brought new food. But there was no prints from him any were. He walked for a league and a half till he saw a large town two miles ahead of him the town's name is Tragnar or in shorter terms his home. Wen he reached the first few buildings the towns people greeted him. Some he knew better then he cared and others not as well as he would like. He headed for the center of town before he got there though he made a sharp left turn and stood in front of an old red wood building he steeped in side and headed for the counter. The walls were filled with plants and the floors was smooth and sparkled in the mid after noon light. Behind the counter stood Lora the goat keeper. Lora a tall elderly woman her long red hair was tied in a ponytail her eyes were a cold silver. Zelanther stood in the front of the counter. ?Ah I see that your finely back good!? said Lora. ?I take it my brother is all ready brought the supples back then?? asked Zelanther. ?Well did you see him on your way back here?? Asked Lora. ?No.? Reapply Zelanther ?Then of course he's here there is were else he could go is there: I suggest you hurry home now it is unlike you to be gone this long.? suggested Lora. So with that Zelanther turned and left wen he got out side he came face to face with Noul a skinny black haired boy his eyes like Zelanther were a deep brown. Noul was a year older then Zelanther. ?I heard you were back you have bin gone for almost sevin days.? Said Noul. ?Good to see you to brother can we go home now.? asked Zelanther. Zelanther and Noul walked together after a wile Noul asked. ?Were did you get that?? He gesturd to the box ? Is that what took you sow long you were supposed to be here two days ago?? wondered Noul. ?It is long story I will tell you wen we get home.? reaplide Zelanther. They walked towards the south side of town as the light cascaded of the houses the smoke from the smoke various buildings were pungent in the evening air. But it was welcomed the town was squed by sun's rays as were the formed of people moving about there business most all the houses were brawn with a ting of red and green. By dusk they reached a tall two story building. The walls of the building had a slight gray to it. The secant floor had a balcony were one could walk from front to the side of the front of the house to look on the town below. The only light that in the house came from the kitchen. As they interred Noul said. ?Mother look what I found!? Sitting at the table was Syra Zelanther and Noul's mother. She turned and took at them both then said. ?Noul leave your brother alone.? ?Ohh all right I will leave him alone till tomorrow...? replied Noul ?That's not far there is only a few hours left in the day and I only just arrived..? Complained Zelanther. ?Stop it you two and Zelanther dear were did you get that bag and what is the other thing in your hand?? Wondered Syra. So Zelanther quickly told them the story and to open the bag and box and again they wold not open. ?Why was that lady just waiting for you and haw did she just appear there!? Question Noul I don't think she was waiting for me but for anyone to come by so that she could give them thees to make shire they will be safe.? replied Zelanther ?Still it don't explain what happen or were they went.? Added Syra. ?No matter go put everything away in your room then wash up and come back dawn for dinner.? Commanded Syra. Zelanther went up stairs to his room a dresser was in the far corner of the room with four candles during in the early moon light. A rake of shelves at the far wall across from the dresser was laded with books he placed the bag beneath his bed and the box on his book shelve then left his room. Wen he finished washing he headed dawn stairs dinner was on the table. The dinner consisted of a meat stew and bread. Wen dinner was over and the bowls were cleaned Zelanther went back up stairs to lay on his bed and instantly fell asleep.

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or this one witch might take the place of the odject if any one likes it better this is the ruft draft of it so well here you go anyway. I put in seprit pecis for ease of read.The Journey To The Tower School Why are you always here you will not go any farther. Yet you know that you belong here or you wouldn't be here now. No I don't think so I just like to watch. Why would they want me anyway I'm not good at anything it has just always been a dream of mine to studdy here. Besides I can go no farther for some reason. So even if I wanted to which I do I can't. That's because no one can get in here till they are thirteen turns of age. Haw old are you? I turn thirteen on the night of the silver moon. I have to go thank you! The name's Montana by the way what's yours? Exeter and thanks again Montana. See you around I hope. That night Exeter decided that he would go to the tower school wen he turned thirteen witch was two days away. The next morning Exeter awoke to a sound coming from every were and no were Awake young one and go leave now we will come for you but you must leave town NOW GO THE BACK WAY towards the tower go now! he realized the voice was with in his own head and was warning him of some thing that was about to take place very soon if it was not all ready happening. So he ran he did not have any family just a barn were he sleep. His parents died many years ago in the last Great War. There was smoke at the beginning of town and people were running about. Not knowing what els to do he followed the instrutions of the voice and ran back twords the tower school. The trip to and back from the school takes day and a half . As he ran through the forest along the path from his viluge to the tower there was a sound coming from the viluge so he turned and saw a black beast flying from the town and coming straight at him. And he woke with a start. That was one mest up dream it felt so real. I have a job for you if you don't mind? the man who spoke was Tarm a kind man and aften needs help with one thing or another. Exeter was all was willing to help him for in return he got a place to sleep. I need you to go out and find a plant for me in need the razem flower. The Razem flower is a black leafed flower with a violet stem it is used for healing. Ok I will get it said Execter. Over the years he has found and brought back almost every kind of plant there is in the Allai forest. But to day that was the last thing he wanted to do it was the day of his birth. Even though he has not celibrated any of them in meany years still he in joys himself so he left to find the flower . By noon he had found the flower but as he picked it he found that one was already picked he figured Tarm was hear one all ready and returned to Tarm but wen he arived he found Tarm colapsed on the floor Execter ran to him only to find he was dead. He called for some of the towns people but no one came after an hour he went to Tarm's house with was dark no candels were lit like they were wen he left. Tarm all wase has candels lit in his house so exacter moved to the house slowly becouse he know some thing was wronge wen he opened the door shadows moved ever so slowly. A hand graded hid sholder from behind. Execter whireld around before him was Tarm. Tarm turned him around and there in the house was the towns people. It was a joke I was not realy dead its a plant that gives the alure of death its the one I had you get relax and have fun. Awake young one and go leave now we will come for you but you must leave town NOW GO THE BACK WAY towards the tower go now! Eexter woke with a start Not again come on. What do you mean again; neverming you have to leave now go and hurry. asked the mystery voice. One again he ran from the town but there was no fire this time no one running about yet he went any way. This time he wen away from the path but still followed in the general direction twords the tower. This time haw ever he did not wake from his dream after a day he disided that what ever was happening he had to go back he had to do what he could to help. As he started to turn around to go back the voice said. I would not do that if I were you: keep going to the tower. He stoped turning and started walking he though about the voice and he rellized that time the voice was not coming from with in his head but from out side it. He whirld around and there infount of him was Kregan one of the teachers of the school. ohh well there go's the secrecy part of this trip any way lets go follow me. ohh and. WHAKE UP.that is the only time that will probibly happen. this time hes awake for shore I will place it here as i finnish them. this will change the rest of the above chapters and the book if people like it. and I have the legual rights to all this and or any thing vary closly like it so im good.

Edited September 14, 2011 by eragon (see edit history)