A Poem That I Wrote For A Contest Legend Fire

[The Simpleton 2]

LEGEND FIRE
<insert fiery sub-title here>

The fire that was legend
Blazed through the wood
Panic-struck woodizens
Fled as fast as they could

The fire that was legend
Was once spoken of
But never was it thought
To suddenly spark off!

The fire that was legend
Was supposed to bring
Merciless destruction and
Loss of kith and kin

The fire that was legend
Did nothing like that now
It simply chewed on the wood
Like a grass-eating cow!

The fire that was legend
Now asked of the poet
"Where is this story going
You rhyme-crazy 'all blow-it'?"

The fire that was legend
From the poet got a surprise
These words were written
Only in the vain quest of a prize!

[harrison858 0]

Hmm.. Well at least the poem rhymes.Good work on your poem, if it is yours. I hope.If you had a fiery-sub title that would be better.A legendary fire... nice.

[Fractured.Logic 0]

Hmm.. Well at least the poem rhymes.

Poems are, most certainly, not required to rhyme, Harrison

 

@ kasperoony :

 

It does not feel like you invested much emotion or subjective interest into this piece. Mind you, the underlying humor is cute... but I am, personally, highly attracted to poetry that radiates passion and emotion from its writer. I would be curious to see what you could do with no boundaries implemented, though. Try it, sometime, and see what comes of it. Freestyle, while (often) initially difficult, is a liberating expression. You don't have to worry about intentionally rhyming, or trying to jam words together to achieve said rhyming. Occasionally, you will find rhyme appearing within a freestyle piece, but it's natural and unintentional... and that speaks far more volumes, in my opinion.

[The Simpleton 2]

Hmm.. Well at least the poem rhymes.

 

Good work on your poem, if it is yours. I hope.

If you had a fiery-sub title that would be better.

 

A legendary fire... nice.

Ha ha this is the kind of feedback I like....harsh :angel:

 

Anyway, thanks for the feedback and just to inform you, this is my own poem and no one in the whole wide world could come up with a lamer one

 

 

It does not feel like you invested much emotion or subjective interest into this piece. Mind you, the underlying humor is cute... but I am, personally, highly attracted to poetry that radiates passion and emotion from its writer. I would be curious to see what you could do with no boundaries implemented, though. Try it, sometime, and see what comes of it. Freestyle, while (often) initially difficult, is a liberating expression. You don't have to worry about intentionally rhyming, or trying to jam words together to achieve said rhyming. Occasionally, you will find rhyme appearing within a freestyle piece, but it's natural and unintentional... and that speaks far more volumes, in my opinion.

Thanks a lot for your feedback;I enjoyed reading it a lot

 

 

Just to inform you both, this poem was written, as I mentioned in the title, for a contest, and it was hosted on a site called "Legendfire". The contest was to create a poem with "Legendfire" as the title and I managed to finish this only hours before the last date - that's why it's not very neat and needs a bit repairing of course...