A New Poem I've Started Writing

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Well, if it makes you feel any better, I've gone and confounded my own mother with this one.

 

Thank you for the compliments, kasperooney, and I find your comments helpful The style is not one I can claim entirely as my own, however... I have just skewed it into the twisted phrase it currently finds itself

 

If you would like to research the style and experiment with something like it, look up "acrostic poem" sometime :angel: It's a great method for starting out with freestyle, in case my comment in your topic interested you enough to follow up on the idea.

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I poked at my hardcopy of the poem and altered the phraseology again. I still can't say whether it's done, or not. I plan to think on it for a while and allow some time for people to leave comments and creative criticism. So, in the meanwhile, here is the most updated variation of the poem:

 

Corporeal misanthropy:

Ambivalence kithes self-destruction;

Tempestuous vilification excretes a residue,

And spreads across one's tongue like

The oil of Szechuan peppers. The essence of Fire pervades; the

Osculum slackens, and drool burbles from the germ-infested

Nether. Cavities accumulate exponentially, spreading

Infection to the root of all evil, and decomposing one's own

Carcass before it is buried.

Formaldehyde, in theory, might also preserve

A shred of the truth. Tho', when the tentative, fledgling

Lie expounds upon itself to create a magnificently grotesque

Legacy of its own, we light the conflagration and hope that the

Ashes will bear our own proverbial phoenix; were it that

Cumulative, rampant flames were the answer to every

Indiscretion? Terra would vie against Jupiter for its noxious

Existence; a charcoal whose effulgence would wane, consumed by

Sulfuric dolour and the dark of the unknown.

Abhorrence is the floodlight that beams its

Radiance down, pinioning the flight of one's Citizen Kane; this

Enigma, which reveals the concubine that is one's consummate hypocrisy.

Lubriciously, one covets their contradictory companion, propagating

Unremittingly; the seed of this dreadfully fertile womb

Rears its terrifying head. Friend and foe are, in the end, the same

Kaolin green ware; the inevitable massacre rends shattered fragments in mass and

Individual acumen, alike. It is said that destruction clears the path for

New life to amass and breed, but at what cost; what life are we fertilizing our figurative

Ground to yield its harvest of?

Imbolc's Br?d quavers with sonorous ire, that her ancient rites have suffered such

Nescient perversion; egocentric manipulation forebodes an ominous fate.

Mue the guilt that one wears like a second skin, and consciously

Eschew for the sake of pandering to the current definition of sagacity. The

Nascence we say that we wish to inspire is shelved in the abandoned athenaeum,

To garner dust as if each obfuscating speck were the most precious of

Acquisitions. Without it, we shall remain uneducated; the ignorant

Laic who lazily tread this well-beaten path.

Conjure from decrepit tomes the essence of Sirona; would she

Resuscitate the dreams and notions that, once upon a time,

Exemplified a species. Our blood has thinned;

Vitality wanes as the primordial connection with a cosmic heartbeat is

Inundated by the consuming obsession to understand. One treats the universe as a

Cadaver, preserved and prone beneath one's indiscrete scalpel, and should it be so

Elated that we have bestowed the opportunity to reveal its most precious of

Secrets to these, our prying minds!

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I would still like to hear back from my fellow Trappers, if they care to lend their input, criticism, or otherwise. In the meanwhile, I have decided that I ought to provide some definitions for some of the less-known vocabulary I've used in my poem. Due to restrictions on how many links a post may contain (at least, so it would seem), I am going to copy/paste definitions in this post. Please check back as I edit this, thanks!

 

Corporeal -

 

Ambivalence -

 

Tempestuous -

 

Excrete -

 

Osculum -

 

Nether -

 

Exponential -

 

Formaldehyde -

 

Tentative -

 

Fledgling -

 

Expound -

 

Magnificent -

 

Grotesque -

 

Conflagration -

 

Proverbial -

 

Cumulative -

 

Rampant -

 

Indiscretion -

 

Noxious -

 

Effulgence -

 

Sulfuric -

 

Dolour -

 

Abhorrence -

 

Pinioning -

Enigma -

 

Concubine -

 

Consummate -

 

Hypocrisy -

 

Lubricious -

 

Contradictory -

 

Propagating -

 

Unremitting -

 

Inevitable -

 

Massacre -

 

Acumen -

 

Amass -

 

Figurative -

Quaver -

 

Sonorous -

 

Ire -

 

Nescient -

 

Egocentric -

 

Forebodes -

 

Ominous -

 

Mue -

 

Eschew -

 

Pander -

 

Sagacity -

 

Nascence -

 

Athenaeum -

 

Garner -

 

Obfuscate -

 

Acquisition -

 

Laic -

 

Decrepit -

 

Tome -

Resuscitate -

 

Notion -

 

Exemplify -

 

Vitality -

 

Primordial -

 

Inundate -

 

Cadaver -

 

Prone -

 

Indiscrete -

 

Scalpel -

 

Elated -

 

Bestow -

 

Pry -

 

reference : Kaolin

 

reference : green ware

 

reference : Citizen Kane

 

reference : Imbolc's

 

reference : Br?d

 

reference : Sirona

Edited June 17, 2009 by Fractured.Logic (see edit history)