The Piper OLD poem of mine...

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A poem I've gotten very good reviews out of. You'd NEVER guess the origin, though. And since I won't double post, at least SOMEONE'S got to make a QUALITY comment/critism before I'll tell! VEG

 

 

 

The Piper

 

Darkness falls, the cannons crash,

The sky is filled with their thundering flash.

A war is raging - in the middle, I'm caught.

Fighting for peace, the utmost sought.

The story I tell is strange indeed,

The story of a Piper, piping on his reed.

The music is monsterous, sweet as summer's day.

Beautiful, mindbending, and terrible in every way.

For that same music killed many a rat,

___and many a child as well.

And that same music tempted me

___into this living hell.

 

So now I fight unseen foes

Following the Piper, wherever he goes.

I saw that Piper long ago

A strange, black figure, he carted in tow.

I see him again, but he's not alone;

Following him are men, not of flesh and bone.

I feel the bullet hard, I fear the end is near,

And all I hear is music playing in my ear.

Goodbye, sweet life, you've been good to me,

___but now I know I'm gone.

Following forever the Piper piping

___his sweet, sad song.

 

 

 

- Mary-Melissa Wilzewski

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I like it very much. Where did it come from and how do you get you ideas i iwsh i could write as good as you very well done. Im impressed by the detail and how it flows. If you know what i mean.

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*laughs*

Honestly, the poem was originally written as a literal retelling of events from Rilla of Ingleside, the last book of the Anne of Green Gables series. Basically, one of Anne's sons wrote a poem called "The Piper", goes to fight in WWI, and dies. The poem itself was never written in the book, so I decided to do my own version.

I wrote this when I was 14. I'm amazed at what I find in it now. Sometimes I feel like I didn't really "write" it, I was just the channel from which it came. Particularly when you look at the rhythm; I'm not very good at rhythm since. LOL

Most of my best stuff I always wonder if I should take credit for; they seem to just "happen". At least I don't feel so selfish for liking them afterwards. ^-^