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dizilluziondmasokist

Goth Cop; Doppleganger Built purely on frustrations with people

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Bruises........Blood........Insane........Handcuffs braces*BLEEP*ed up heels and facesHow much would you payTo give life faster facesA tear shedTatoos of long agoWho bled moreMe or youWith a memory blownOn stupid powders and liesA survival that shownI haven't lost my eyesCrystal suicideHigh, paying to dieI have fought the mirrorOnly to become a lieSleepin' with an enemy, thisThinking of those I missI've seen her faceOnly to tasteThe sin I would recieveOnly a mind to wasteNever a body to concieveI've only a birdAnd a song to singBlack then ashThough they beHead's dark tearsKharma for *BLEEP*ed up yearsThe one thingI will kill herSo that the nation shall feel the sting

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No fluff or over the top allusions in this piece. The sounds are crisp, short lines are harsh and so well rendered, like "Crystal suicide" and "A tear shed / Tatoos of long ago." And the rhyme scheme is not obnoxious but keeps the rhythm driven. Here the form matches the content; feels to me like goth angst succinctly represented. That's just some freeking good writing.When I get that goth site eventually pulled together, I'd love to have some of your work featured there

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